It would be nice if any of your raps had a point.
Yo pass the mic,
I'm dissing the bitch I don't like.
I got King Kong in the trunk,
Yo dad your breath smell like ass of a skunk.
I make hits like I'm boxing,
In the long run I'm the last anyone will be mocking.
I spit it like 50 Cent,
But my jaw don't have a dent.
I'm going to own, T-Town,
I ask myself, "why am I fucking with this clown."
Because I'm the best,
I be banging it on the West.
I look at my past and ask "I did this for real?",
That's right and it's me against the world.
Like this 1 also, I think its good you included 50, makes your message clear and everybody knows who he is!!!
Love this style of rap
Well done
Dofs...
I agree that 50 Cent should not be name dropped in this. Most people consider him as a joke, and his flow is pretty pathetic.
You could use Mad Skillz, Killah Cam, Nasty Nas or any other rapper with a three syllable name who is more credible.
Nice.
I could sorta get a hip-hop rhythm throughout all the piece. but what I usually don't like about your rap songs are all the allusions--King Kong (yeah, it's funny, but it doesn't mean anything) and 50 Cent (why would any rap song include 50 cent? It disgusts me) The last line was the best. It broke the rhytm but sort of made a new one. 
Ha, this last line reminds me on Eminem.
I mean, every time you here his name, he's fighting some guy.
Not bad. A bit harsh,but I guess you did have your reasons.
'Dissing' isn't a real good word to explain that sentance.
'I'm leaving the...' or 'I'm leavin' the...' to keep it more in the character.
Dont hate me, you know the smileys cool.
I appreciate you rating all this and adding a warning in your titles.
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